Self Critique:
Place-less Senses
The main idea I started with was that we only consume certain beverages at certain times and places. That transformed into something that had to do with working, and motivation, which then turned into a film about perception and our interpretation of perception and space.
Source of the idea was the free writing we did. It just came. It’s important to me because personally I like beverages, almost more than food itself. The real development of the idea is important to me because I like films that challenge our perception and put us through a psychological paradox and an inner war. Films that challenge and treat the mind.
The key emotion or experience for the audience should be confusion, with a tad bit of humor and being able to identify with the subject even though she could possibly be crazy.
Synopsis for both (original and rework) : Woman makes beverage, beverage is born, crazy things begin to happen to her such as; placement of beverages, voices, etc. Woman is questionably insane at the end.
Theme after finishing it: Magic Coffee.
Strengths: Good choreographing of talent during 1 scene.
Good following the woman throughout running sense.
Good use of web cam
Not bad casting
Weaknesses: Bad cuts and edits - Everywhere!
Not clear enough that the coffee was being moved at first!
It’s about magic coffee.
Camera movement changed to radically
Not trippy enough
Journal Notes:
I discovered when reworking the film that some of my problems still exist, but hopefully with more knowledge and practice of using this medium I’ll overcome them. Magic Coffee is not what I was aiming for, hopefully, for the rework people will think it’s really about something else. I realize that getting the right takes the right way is real important when you’re in the thick of things. When your shooting and when your thinking up the storyboard, that’s what’s really important. Even if you have to change clothes, even if you have to stand over a gas stove, etc,. Because it’s really gratifying to see it afterward anyway. That’s really what we’re going for, a sense of how great the work was, how different, a sense of wonder.
Synopsis for both (original and rework) : Woman makes beverage, beverage is born, crazy things begin to happen to her such as; placement of beverages, voices, etc. Woman is questionably insane at the end.
Theme after finishing it: Magic Coffee.
Strengths: Good choreographing of talent during 1 scene.
Good following the woman throughout running sense.
Good use of web cam
Not bad casting
Weaknesses: Bad cuts and edits - Everywhere!
Not clear enough that the coffee was being moved at first!
It’s about magic coffee.
Camera movement changed to radically
Not trippy enough
Journal Notes:
I discovered when reworking the film that some of my problems still exist, but hopefully with more knowledge and practice of using this medium I’ll overcome them. Magic Coffee is not what I was aiming for, hopefully, for the rework people will think it’s really about something else. I realize that getting the right takes the right way is real important when you’re in the thick of things. When your shooting and when your thinking up the storyboard, that’s what’s really important. Even if you have to change clothes, even if you have to stand over a gas stove, etc,. Because it’s really gratifying to see it afterward anyway. That’s really what we’re going for, a sense of how great the work was, how different, a sense of wonder.
Definitely more structured than last. I like how you pushed the "crazy" further than the first one too. Plus the in camera effects are pretty nice. It still moves a little slow, the shots are too long and the composition of some of the shots (namely the one with you on the couch) are weak. But overall, nice improvement.
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